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Anim Critique Needed

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Alright guys, I need some critique on this walk cycle.

Advanced Critique is ON! :)

I'm at work at the moment and I need to animate a lion walking, so I need to know if this looks alright. Rip it up, point out all the flaws, lemme know everything that might need fixing. Truth be told, I needn't go into this much detail for the purpose of what I'm doing, but I want to know how to improve it anyway.

Please, I don't need praise here, just the critique and possible improvements. I'll probably move this to scraps later.

And please excuse the lack of ears and poor anatomy, I was more focused on the motion itself.

Rip it up, people :D

EDIT: Here's the fixed version of this before I redid the whole thing entirely: test_lion2.swf

Check out the new one here though, since this one's going in the scraps: Anim Critique part 2
:)
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:star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

From what I can see, you've made a good and simple animation and the anatomy seems to be fine. However, the animation is slight choppy and I recommend that you use more frames to make the animation smoother. The originality isn't much as it's an outline of a walking tiger. The technique seems okay and I don't think you should change it. The impact isn't strong as it's a simple animation but if detail, effects, colour, backround and (if possible) shading was added, the impact would be much stronger.

Please read: Sorry if this critique isn't THAT helpful as it's my first ever critique but I hope that this helped somehow. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=":) (Smile)"/>